The Leaves of Spring.

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The Leaves of Spring.

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The other day, 'mid thundering and lightning It hailed.
A sudden and precipitate crash
Of hailstones large, like bullets pitilessly
Shot down the trees of Spring and lovely flowers,
And on the lawn lay strewn long, murdered lines
Of leaves, the young and tender leaves--I thought
How swift, with leaden drop, they fell! Even so
On other fields . . . the young and tender leaves.

The comparison between human and plant life is too explicit, and the phrasing awkward ("murdered lines of leaves"); yet, in its emphasis on human suffering without differentiating between ally and enemy, and in the tone of sorrow and the sense of futility and waste, the poem moves away from traditional platitudes about war towards the more modern attitudes of society.

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"Man's inhumanity to man!"
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Well said...I agree with you 100%.

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Post by Kersten Lee »

VickiCD,
Hi, I usually see deeper meanings in almost everything. I see the
comparison now, but when I read it I saw hail.

Hail is a reality here, like tornadoes. It described the feelings I have when
there are horrible hail storms. It does murder and destroy, at times, all
kinds of life and beauty and sometimes peoples livelyhoods. I twice in
my life was in hail storms when the hail was the size of softballs and
larger. They blasted holes through good roofing. It was quite scary.

A couple years ago near here the hailstones melted together in the sky
and formed volley ball sized hail. It's good they were so few. A few cattle
were killed.

May I ask if you composed this? It really gives me the willies.

Kersten
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Post by VickiCD »

Hi Kersten.

I do appoligize for not following up on this post and supplying you with a immediate response. The past four weeks has been crazy for me, but now that I'm back, I'm hoping to catch up and contribute more information. Yes is the answer to your question, one of my favorite pass time is writing poetry.

Take care.

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Post by Jassmine(SO) »

Howdy Vicki,

Awesome poem! I really like the line "murdered lines of leaves", wonderful analogy 8)

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